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| Character Template Personal Information Name: Sohma Rain Age: 28 Gender: Male Village: SunagakureAppearance Information Looks Image:
Height: 5ft8 Weight: 145 poundsPersonality Information Personality Description: Within a battle Rain is cool calm and collected, Never once will he underestimate his opponent no matter what the foe's rank is whether a genin or a kage, Within Rains mind a genin is just the same as a kage and needs to be handled like one. Life or Death battles excite the shinobi causing his flirty or cocky side to come out tho he acts in this manner once more underestimating his opponent is something he refuses to do. During training, Rain will fight as if the fight is serious never underestimating or taking it easy on his partner, He refuses to go down in training tho is smart enough to not use deadly attack's to there full potential Rain has had trouble dealing with his family alway's believing his older sister to be the favorite, Likes: Rain enjoy's the usual thing's the rain the wamrth of a fire just like everyone else he has many likes to many to be listed Dislikes: Arrogance Lifetime Goals: Simple To protect his nakama Role: To Protect His Village- Spoiler:
Average Shinobi Class: These are the Shinobi that do not want to be grouped in with the other classes and fit into a certain category. They are their own people each individually and can have any kind of the following combination in skills Gains: +15 In anything, +15 In anything, +10 In Anything
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Monster: They are exactly as they are called monsters, even though they may not always be this way, they usually are great smart shinobi when they first start their shinobi careers. However their lust for power and more jutsu can twist their lust for more battle and kills changing them over tiime turning them into mad dogs and crazed shinobi. They have the ability to always survive the curse seal and like heros have a 50% disount on A rank or higher Ninjutsu. Gains: +20 Stat points
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Fuuinjutsu Master: A true master of seals, he knows nearly everything there is about modern day seals and can make the most complex intracate seals around the world. Only a Fuuinjutsu Master can attempt a Cursed Seal or Bijuu Sealing. They do not have to pay for any jutsu they make, if they are approved. If they were chose the Fuuinjutsu Specialist class. If not they only get a 50% discount. Along with the Hero Class they can also learn The Flying Thunder God Jutsu at an extremely high cost. Gains: +10 Stat points
Skill Information Rank: A-Rank (Jounin) Jutsu Specialist: Nintai Main: Fuin Sub: Nin Bloodline: Snake Handler's Elements: Wind + Earth Classes: Average Shinobi, Taijutsu Adept, Taijutsu Mastery Stats: 115 + 40 + 20 + 20 = 195
Physical Stats Speed: 40 Stamina: 25 Strength: 20 Agility: 30 Physical Endurance: 20
Chakra Stats: Chakra Reserves: 40
Mental Stats Intelligence: 20Jutsu Template:
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Average Shinobi Class: These are the Shinobi that do not want to be grouped in with the other classes and fit into a certain category. They are their own people each individually and can have any kind of the following combination in skills Gains: +15 In anything, +15 In anything, +10 In Anything
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Monster: They are exactly as they are called monsters, even though they may not always be this way, they usually are great smart shinobi when they first start their shinobi careers. However their lust for power and more jutsu can twist their lust for more battle and kills changing them over tiime turning them into mad dogs and crazed shinobi. They have the ability to always survive the curse seal and like heros have a 50% disount on A rank or higher Ninjutsu. Gains: +20 Stat points
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Fuuinjutsu Master: A true master of seals, he knows nearly everything there is about modern day seals and can make the most complex intracate seals around the world. Only a Fuuinjutsu Master can attempt a Cursed Seal or Bijuu Sealing. They do not have to pay for any jutsu they make, if they are approved. If they were chose the Fuuinjutsu Specialist class. If not they only get a 50% discount. Along with the Hero Class they can also learn The Flying Thunder God Jutsu at an extremely high cost. Gains: +10 Stat points
Snake jutsu
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Name: Gathering Of Snake's Rank: A Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Moderate Description: If Orochimaru is somehow sliced in half by the opponent, snakes come from the halves and bring him back together. (total useage two times per thread)
Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi. The user can only use this three times per thread
Name: Myriad Snake Net Formation Rank: B Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Moderate Description: With this technique, Orochimaru can release a torrent of countless snakes from his mouth, forming a wall of snakes. The snakes will then rise and rush towards his target, being almost impossible to stop or evade. While crawling together the snakes form a defensive wall blocking almost any attack. The snakes can also open their mouths to extend Kusanagi-like blades.
Name: Snake Authority Spell Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.
Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification Rank: C Type: Modification Range: n/a Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain. Charge Time: Instant. Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent
Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands Rank: D Type: Nin. Range: Close (0m ~ 5m), Mid (5m ~ 10m) Chakra Use: moderate. Charge Time: handseals. Description: Kanashibari no Jutsu is an advanced Ninjutsu technique used to temporarily bind an individual or animal. With the person frozen in place, the ninja can either take the opportunity to attack or to retreat.
Name: Snake Aresnal Rank: D Type: Nin. Description: A famous example of a snake handler technique. With this jutsu, the user has a snake inside their chest cavity that can hold any item, generally a sword of some sorts. When it is needed, the user can cause the snake's head to extend out of his mouth, removing the weapon.
Name: Senei Jashu - Hidden Shadow Snake Hands Rank: C Type: Nin-tai Range: 0-5m Chakra Use: moderate. Charge Time: None Duration: Fast Description: Senei Jashu is a Ninjutsu technique that manifests a snake which extends from the sleeve. The ninja can extend these snakes to attack a target. Once extended the snake can bite into the target to hold and bind them
Name: Senei Jashu - Multipple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands Rank: B Type: Nin-tai Range: 0-5m Chakra Use: moderate. Charge Time: None Duration: Fast Description: Senei Jashu is a Ninjutsu technique that manifests multiple snakes which extend from the sleeves. The ninja can extend these snakes to attack a target. Once extended the snake can bite into the target to hold and bind them
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Elemental Jutsu
Name: Whirlind fist Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Wind Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user shoot's his fist foward releasing a whirlwind from his fist toward's there targets
Name: Wind Release : Drilling Air Bullet's Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Wind Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: To use this technique, Rain will first take a deep breath, and then pound his stomach to apply external pressure, the power of which it uses to shoot a highly compressed air ball from its mouth. The expelled air ball is mighty enough to hollow out the ground, Because of the large quantity of chakra kneaded into it, it explodes the moment it reaches its target, dealing an enormous amount of damage, as well as leveling anything in its path.
Name: Wind Release: Dust Cloud Technique Rank: A Type: Nin Element: Wind Range: All Chakra Use: Moderate Description: This technique creates a stream of high-velocity wind containing dust particles, capable of decimating even durable objects in a matter of moments. The completed technique is directed through vertically overlapped hands that are placed in front of the user's mouth, immediately after forming the necessary hand seal. This technique was powerful enough to destroy one of Kakuzu's masked creatures in an instant.
Name: Earth Release: Antilion technique Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Earth Range: Medium Chakra Use: Moderate Description: his jutsu causes the ground and everything on and around it to be sucked in towards the middle of a large pit, much like the method an antlion uses to catch prey. Upon being dragged to the center, the victim will then be sucked underground. There the victim, depending on how deep the user makes them sink, will be trapped and/or suffocated. The range of the pit is determined by how much chakra is put into the jutsu.
Name: Golem Technique Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Earth Range: All Chakra Use: Moderate Description: This technique allows Akatsuchi to expel a large creature composed of rock from his mouth which will stay connected to his mouth. The golem has a fair amount of brute strength, being able to bite and tear off an opponent's flesh with its mouth and hands, respectively. It is also very durable, as it was left almost completely intact after being hit by an explosion.This makes the golem ideal for serving as both an ally and as a shield.
Name: Earth Release : Earth Spear Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Earth Range: Self Chakra Use: Moderate Description: The user flows chakra through all parts of their body, which hardens their skin to a steel-like quality. This increases their defensive power to the utmost limits. The user's skin becomes much darker, an almost black colour. Furthermore, the destructive power of physical attacks is increased, making this a great all-purpose technique. The amount of techniques that can break through the areas hardened by the Earth Spear are close to zero, not including its undeniable weak point: Lightning Release ninjutsu. Kakuzu used this technique through the use of his earth-element mask. Kakuzu demonstrated the ability to use this to cover himself partially (i.e. his hand and lower arm, and the side of his head) without using handsigns, which gave him a significant tactical advantage against ambushes.
Supplementary Jutsu
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Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification Rank:B Type: Modification Range: n/a Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain. Charge Time: Instant. Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent
Name: Weapon levitation Technique Rank: B Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short-Mid Chakra Use: Low Description: This is a technique that allows the user to levitate any chakra based weapon and attack foes at mid-range. The blade will move according to Orochimaru's finger movements.
Name: Vanishing Facial Copy Technique Rank: B Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: This technique was developed for spying with grisly effects. The user applies their hand onto the subject's face, stealing its features and making it their own. Since what is stolen is the face itself, the disguise achieved through facial features alteration won't reveal the tiniest flaw. The victims of this technique are reduced to faceless corpses atrocious even to look at. The user can even change their voice to sound like that of the victims, making a very convincing copy. However, with enough force, the face can wrinkle and tear to the point of the user's actual face being shown underneath. The face can be peeled off at any point.
Name: Summoning Contract (snakes) Rank: C-S Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short - Chakra Use: Low-High Description:The summoning technique allow's a shinobi to summon creature's who live on other planes. This can vary from multiple creatures to statue's or even gate like creature's. Summonings are held by a contract which can appear in scroll or tattoo like form. (Rain uses Tattoo)
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Academy
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Name: Henge no Jutsu • Transformation Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique transforms the user’s appearance to that of another person. However, it is not a permanent transformation and a mental image of what they are transformed into. Certain aspects of a ninja will not change merely by transformation, these things may include injuries, tool pocket placements etc. The jutsu will dispel should the user be injured.
Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu • Body Replacement Technique Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to alter places in a speedy manner with another nearby object. This is done mere seconds before an attack lands, thus making the attacker believe his or her attack was a success. Whatever object was used to alter places will receive the brunt of the enemy’s attack instead.
Name: Kai • Release Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Range: Close (0m - 5m) Element: N/A Description: By stopping the flow of chakra in their body, and then applying an even stronger power to disrupt the flow of the caster's chakra; the user may dispel the effects of a genjutsu. This can also be used on another individual that is stuck in a genjutsu by preforming the necessary hand seal and then touching them.
Name: Suimen Hokou no Waza • Act of Water Surface Walking Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: NA Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on water by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet or hands. Because of water’s nature, this requires the user to be quick to adjust the amount of chakra they must emit to their feet in order to maintain a constant balance. Users may also walk, run and “skate” across the water when using this technique.
Name: Kinobori no Waza • Act of Tree Climbing Rank: D Type: N/A Range: N/A Element: N/A Description: This technique allows the user to balance themselves on trees and vertical walls by focusing a constant and steady stream of chakra to the user’s feet. Gravity can easy be defined if this technique is mastered, allowing people to even stand upside down. If too much chakra is exerted the user will be pushed away; bark breaking and causing the user to then fall. If not enough chakra is exerted the user will lose their footing and fall
History and RP Sample History:
Pre-Academy Arc:
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December 24th Christmas eve at 2:31 A.m a new life was brought into the world by two of sunagakure's most hated shinobi. Two men had finally been given there beautiful baby boy. Having used a surrogate the two men were undoubtably happy as ever. Being gay forced hatred upon them tho things changed under the rule of the new kage soon when there child whom was named Rain Haruno would begin his adventure he would also change the world's way of thinking or so he hoped. His toddler year's remained the same as many loving parents toys and present's.
Academy Arc:
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When he became of age Rain was like many enrolled into the academy were he would learn to become a shinobi. During the academy year's listening became something he hated to do his skill's were increasing at a rapid rate tho unlike those who called themselves geniuses Rain kept to himself for the majority become friends with only a handful of the shinobi. Most he found arrogant boasting about there parent's ninja there parents had taken down.
Within the academy they were taught the value's of chakra and the basic chakra control. They were also taught the values or the pro's and cons of certain situations the art of weapon using and the three major specialities. Ninjutsu Genjutsu and Taijutsu. Rain seemed to ignore most about the genjutsu tho listened to the part about breaking it. He then focused himself into ninjutsu and taijutsu.
The ninjutsu classes Rain excelled at becoming the first to master the three basic techniques. The Substitution, Clone Technique And The Transformation Technique.
Taijutsu training seemed to be one of his expert area's allowing him to show off his physical power. Tho taijutsu training was phsyically draining it seemed even more rewarding.
Genin Arc:
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It took the shinobi only one try to pass the exam tho everyone else passed aswell. This meant the shinobi was like everyone else.
The day after they graduated the academy every single genin was given a team. The team was known as a four man cell and in suna they were given letter's. That day the new ninja gathered in the large classroom and were told to take a seat like usual the genin all followed there chuunin instructor's example.
The instructor then began to call out multiple name's placing each in there devision. Rain's name was finally called being placed with a Kunoichi and a male shinobi. The female was known as Hara while the man was a known as Kanku. That was all for today. It mean't that they had a chance to bond and from what Rain gathered the kunoichi was'nt much of a fighter instead she focused her ability on cunningness trap's tho from what she said she had the current best chakra control in the class.
Kanku on the other hand was vile he detested everyone and had mental health issues known to have a thing for blood lust.
The next day came and Rain followed his morning routine saying hello and giving each of his dad's a hug before eating his breakfast then brushing his teeth after a shower and a dry off the shinobi was good to go and left for the academy.
Upon his arrival he noticed his two member's were all ready there tho kaku was currently strangling the kunoichi who quivered in fear and gasped for breath. Rain would quickly react his fist slammed forward at amazing speed's aiming to crash into his opponent's faceor so he thought a wall of iron sand blasted up protecting him. The second hit struck tho the ichibi host slammed into the wall his sand falling from the kunoichi tho the host aimed another attack towards them only to be stopped by a man of amazing speed and power pushing the blast away from them. This stopped Kanku's assault. After a verbal bashing the jounin teacher took the three genin to the suna desert were they began practicing team work or Hara and Rain did. Kanku refused to accept help tho there jounin wiped the floor with him he seemed to have much more trouble with the two genin tho they were still wiped out.
Month's of hard ass training passed proving that the genin were capable of taking anything in there stride even the suicidal and demented Kanku. During there training Rain discovered his use of taijutsu to be an advantage due to his impressive speed he held. Months later they were registered into the chuunin exam's Chuunin Exam:
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The first stage of the chuunin exam's came as a big shock to the genin. The first exam was a written test and all the question's were incredibly hard. Rather than anything else the shinobi scribbled and doodled on the paper knowing he would never answer a question. He was then appauled to here the proctor speak about failing the exam and neer being able to take it after if they decided to remain and failed. So with a sudden sigh rain beganto lift up his hand before it was slammed into the desk by a small yet powerful chain of sand. PASS Rains eye's lit up as he passed the exam without answering a question.
Exam two
The challenge exam to get three team's flag's totalling the amount up to 4. They were sent into the suna desert into the large forest near the border after signing the release form he could'nt help but sigh as the three were sent into the deadly desert forest.
They were done before they knew it and now held the record after completing the test in less than an hour and without a scratch on them.. Sadly it was due to kanku who managed to remove every obstacle in record time using his sand and massive power tho many died Rain could'nt help but feel relieved that the host was on his team for once.
The final stage of the exam was a rather wierd one on one fight were Rain was pitted against his team mate Kanku. The fight began with kanku using his sand to attack. Rain had a little surprise for his student as he vanished aiming his fist to the face to be stopped by sand tho his leg came up slamming the sand user not letting up using the dancing leaf shadow rain shot his opponent into the air with a leaf gale before slamming him hard with a leaf hurricane the good thing about the sand user he had little tolerance to pain that attack was all it took to finish the man. Chuunin Arc:
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During his chuunin time Rain spent almost every day training his newly aquired summoning contract he began to create multiple snake like jutsu. During his day's off he was given the job of temporary teacher in the academy allowing the villager's to learn from him and to see is techniques causingmultiple ooooh's and awww's from the class.
Other day's he was out with his team taking on missions far more advanced than the crappy dog walking missions they recently did. Most of these missions involved assasination of less dangerous people or information gathering.
Having perfected his taijutsu and Ninjutsu techniques he would infact be taken in over his other two and be given the chance at a jounin title. Jounin Exam:
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The Day of the jounin exam's came during the run up Rain had been training with Hara every day. Hara being very nice about him being chosen for the jounin exam's while Kanku refused to even look at Rain.
Walking into the familiar arena held for the chuunin exam stage three in suna Rain felt the warmth of the suna sun blaze upon him as he entered the main battlefield when he saw his opponent hs jounin sensei Rei Yuugre.
The battle started rapidly as both tai master's darted foward fist's slammed together while the flurry of legs darted strikes blocked in all directions tho a confused bow slammed into the chuunins face forcing his lip to burst and blood to erupt causing the chuunin to escape the tai battle. Blood swiped from his lip now remained on his finger before sliding up his arm. A charge caused the chuunin to release a white snake which held the tai user in place a powerful leaf glade forced him free yet into the air with a broken jaw before being struck with a leaf great hurricane slammed him to the ground. Reaction being quick the jounin was up before the chuunin touched the ground and once more tai battles erupted hours past neithe rgiving way until a wrong step caused the jounin to have his arms broken by the chuunin the proctor blew on the whistle and the battle was over the shinobi was of jounin rank and proud
Rp Sample
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Rain released another feral growl as his attack's were deflected in one fell swoop and he had no time no chance of dodging the masive blast that smashed into him. Tho thank's to his flexible and nimble body the neko like male easily pulled out of the knock back and skidded softly on the ground. His eye's winced in pain as he watched another tail sprout from Aoi. Nibi san was screaming fiercly within the young male tho a feral growl shut her up kind words followed to soothe her... "Nibi-Sama calm yourself we have a chance to win. We are as one i can tell i hear you That is not Aoi - Sama it is someone ....the kyuubi is incontrol but together we can win"
Rain would now under go yet another personality change as he stood up firm not shy like he was when he entered the battle of happily having fun previously now he stood firm the kid gloves were off and he was about to show the kyuubi what a host can do when there bijuu and them work together. Rain did not move from his spot nor did he falter from his mood. As the hand shot towards him like a fist the kyuubi's vision would be blurred and due to its speed would kick up a large dust storm covering the battle field
Within the dust storm and the kyuubi would feel it to its fist had connected with something a firm statue of sorts that it could not break or yet the thing the fist connected with refused to break. The dust storm would blast from the area as a powerful aura kicked up a blast of wind the aura of the nibi was now huge and all that could be seen was the chakra fist struggling to push back the thing that stopped it. The thing being only one of Rain's arm's. Tho was it truly Rain's it was completly incased in a blue flame and resembled greatly the nibi's own front paw. Rain's face would be bent over as he smiled ever so lightly staring at the two tailed kyuubi then he pushed no the power of the nibi's host had increased to new hights in this stunning transformation the chakra of the kyuubi would split as the nibi host charged he kept his transformed arm and hand within the boiling chakra of the kyuubi's extended arm and tore towards the two tailed kyuubi. Using his knowledge that he had learned within the battle the Host of the nibi was using the heat of the kyuubi chakra to amplify the Blue fire greatly combining that with the speed the blue flame incredibly and easily sliced through the arm of the kyuubi as the host charged forward
Rain would not falter his speed increasing every step he took pushing himself forward with the support of the nibi who purred within his mind telling him that together they would not fail unlike the kyuubi and Aoi Rain and the nibi were one entity fighting as if and as they charged the aura took a new shape it seemed more catlike and the eye's Rain had were glowing a golden yellow shining. He would not let down using the nibi's speed and advanced power he would aim his enhanced fist at the face of the kyuubi and if it struck it would tear it and push the kyuubi through the air into the massive mountain behind it.
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 4:30 pm | |
| Word your classes as they are mentioned in Class Abilities. Which means copy and paste the entire paragraph and space it out accordingly. I saw no mention of what your rank is. All it says is "A-Rank." Does that mean you're a missing-nin or a Jounin? (Pretty sure Missing-Nin is closed at the moment) Also; your snake contract has yet to be approved. So until then the profile cannot be approved even once you fix these mistakes. You also have 28 jutsu. If you plan on being Jounin-level, then remove eight. - Quote :
- Stats: 115 + 40 + 20 + 20 = 195
Physical Stats Speed: 40 Stamina: 30 Strength: 20 Agility: 30 Physical Endurance: 20
Chakra Stats: Chakra Reserves: 40
Mental Stats Intelligence: 20 Explain to me how that makes mathematical sense? Now; onto jutsu. - Quote :
- Name: Gathering Of Snake's
Rank: A Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Moderate Description: If Orochimaru is somehow sliced in half by the opponent, snakes come from the halves and bring him back together. That seems EXTREMELY god mod. Add some restrictions to it like how long it takes to heal and if it only applies to being sliced in half (for instance, if an arm were to be sliced off, would this technqiue work on it). - Quote :
- Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi. Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered. - Quote :
- Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification
Rank: n/a Type: Modification Range: n/a Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain. Charge Time: Instant. Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent Make this C-A rank. Make the range "self." C rank should be basic body extending and bending, B would be advanced, and A would be what Orochimaru can do. I find this technique rather over powered, but they are still prone to attacks so there isn't anything wrong with it. You also have this technique placed twice. Remove one. - Quote :
- Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint. The bolded part, remove it. Self intelligence and inescapable restraint is way too strong for a C rank. Either drag it to B or remove that part in general. Also, the poison fangs bit is even more over powered for a C rank technique. Either remove it or drag it up a rank. If you want to keep it as it is it'll have to be A rank, as it's far too over powered as it is. Also, if you intend to keep the poison, add how long the effects last/take to kick in and whether or not it would be fatal. If the poison is weak enough you can keep it at C, unless you choose to keep the intelligence bit. - Quote :
- Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Rank: B Type: Nin-tai Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Chakra Use: Little. Charge Time: None. Duration: Fast. Description: Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware. Just change the name. You have it wrong xD You also placed this twice in your app, albeit in different names. Remove one. - Quote :
- Name: Wind Release : Drilling Air Bullet's
Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Wind Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: To use this technique, Shukaku will first take a deep breath, and then pound its stomach to apply external pressure, the power of which it uses to shoot a highly compressed air ball from its mouth. The expelled air ball is mighty enough to hollow out the ground, and level an entire forest. Because of the large quantity of chakra kneaded into it, it explodes the moment it reaches its target, dealing an enormous amount of damage, as well as leveling anything in its path. Edit the description to fit your character. - Quote :
- Name: Golem Technique
Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Earth Range: All Chakra Use: Moderate Description: This technique allows Akatsuchi to expel a large creature composed of rock from his mouth which will stay connected to his mouth.[1] The golem has a fair amount of brute strength, being able to bite and tear off an opponent's flesh with its mouth and hands, respectively. It is also very durable, as it was left almost completely intact after being hit by an explosion.[1] This makes the golem ideal for serving as both an ally and as a shield. If you're going to copy pasta it word for word, at least remove the "[1]" 's. Just using this as an example, as there are many more similar to this. kthx - Quote :
- Name: Weapon levitation Technique
Rank: B Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short-Mid Chakra Use: Low Description: This is a technique that allows Orochimaru to levitate the Sword of Kusanagi and attack foes at mid-range. The blade will move according to Orochimaru's finger movements. Alter it to apply to every chakra based weapon, not just Kusanagi. You're missing two E-rank, unless you just don't want to add them. That's about it for now. I have yet to read the History and Sample RP, but there is rarely anything wrong with those two. Also; put some more effort in your jutsu. It's extremely obvious you scraped them from a site. If there's a canon name in there, change the name to something like your character's name or "the user". |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 4:46 pm | |
| Name: Snake Authority Spell Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.
(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)
as to going through every jutsu removing cannon names and the number things well Uzumaki ken has cannon names in his jutsu which were approved so i wont be doing that
Half of the snake type jutsu are from the snake handler's clan already here which i used them from which ken approved
Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.
Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.
Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in
infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique
Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification Rank: n/a Type: Modification Range: n/a Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain. Charge Time: Instant. Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent
Make this C-A rank. Make the range "self." C rank should be basic body extending and bending, B would be advanced, and A would be what Orochimaru can do. I find this technique rather over powered, but they are still prone to attacks so there isn't anything wrong with it. You also have this technique placed twice. Remove one.
Its a cannon c rank What orochimaru does is c rank theres nothing over powered about being able to stretch your body
Name: Gathering Of Snake's Rank: A Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Moderate Description: If Orochimaru is somehow sliced in half by the opponent, snakes come from the halves and bring him back together.
That seems EXTREMELY god mod. Add some restrictions to it like how long it takes to heal and if it only applies to being sliced in half (for instance, if an arm were to be sliced off, would this technqiue work on it).
Ill add a limit to the usage on the technique most likely a two or three times limit |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 5:19 pm | |
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- Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.
(Cannon Information AND cannon rank) I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that. - Quote :
- Half of the snake type jutsu are from the snake handler's clan already here which i used them from which ken approved
It's not approved, first of all. Second, I don't care. If it's over powered, it's over powered. - Quote :
- Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.
Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.
Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in
infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique If it is like being a mole or hiding in water, then add that. As it stands right now it makes the ninja completely incapable of taking damage unless the opponent has the correct element, and even then they would have to see you, which is extremely hard in a field of trees or even the ground. - Quote :
- Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification
Rank: n/a Type: Modification Range: n/a Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain. Charge Time: Instant. Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent
Make this C-A rank. Make the range "self." C rank should be basic body extending and bending, B would be advanced, and A would be what Orochimaru can do. I find this technique rather over powered, but they are still prone to attacks so there isn't anything wrong with it. You also have this technique placed twice. Remove one.
Its a cannon c rank What orochimaru does is c rank theres nothing over powered about being able to stretch your body The user can contour their shape to fit the surrounding, I simply figured that would be at least B rank considering you're completely immune to Taijutsu in this manner. Also, it's not C rank in the canon, it's "Unknown." And I didn't say it was over powered, I said I think it's over powered. That's just my general opinion. - Quote :
- Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Rank: B Type: Nin-tai Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Chakra Use: Little. Charge Time: None. Duration: Fast. Description: Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware.
Just change the name. You have it wrong xD You also placed this twice in your app, albeit in different names. Remove one. Quote: Name: Wind Release : Drilling Air Bullet's Rank: B Type: Nin Element: Wind Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: To use this technique, Shukaku will first take a deep breath, and then pound its stomach to apply external pressure, the power of which it uses to shoot a highly compressed air ball from its mouth. The expelled air ball is mighty enough to hollow out the ground, and level an entire forest. Because of the large quantity of chakra kneaded into it, it explodes the moment it reaches its target, dealing an enormous amount of damage, as well as leveling anything in its path.
Edit the description to fit your character. You didn't fix these. The first one is incorrectly named, the second doesn't make sense for a human. - Quote :
- Name: Vanishing Facial Copy Technique
Rank: B Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: This technique was developed for spying with grisly effects. The user applies their hand onto the subject's face, stealing its features and making it their own. Since what is stolen is the face itself, the disguise achieved through facial features alteration won't reveal the tiniest flaw. The victims of this technique are reduced to faceless corpses atrocious even to look at. The user can even change their voice to sound like that of the victims, making a very convincing copy. However, with enough force, the face can wrinkle and tear to the point of the user's actual face being shown underneath. The face can be peeled off at any point. is the exact same as - Quote :
- Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Rank: B Type: Nin-tai Range: Close (0m ~ 5m) Chakra Use: Little. Charge Time: None. Duration: Fast. Description: Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware. except you screwed up the name and used a different description. |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 5:28 pm | |
| Name: Snake Authority Spell Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.
(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)
I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that.
Tough poop its ranking and abilities remain cannon and unless stated as overpwered by ken im following the cannon ranking ontop of that as its a summoning type technique the poison used by the snakes is located on my summoning application refer to that and to the instant kill shadow immitation technique does exactly the same aswell as many jutsu
Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.
Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.
Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in
infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique
If it is like being a mole or hiding in water, then add that. As it stands right now it makes the ninja completely incapable of taking damage unless they have the correct element, and even then they would have to see you, which is extremely hard in a field of trees or even the ground.
And your point is if im fighting in a field of tree's and the jutsu is used then its used destroy that tree and there you go im there common knowledge it doesnt need to be added in or mentioned its like another jutsu on top of that they dont need the correct elements fire wind water lighting earth can all destroy a tree so your argument on this technique is invalid |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 5:41 pm | |
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- Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.
(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)
I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that.
Tough poop its ranking and abilities remain cannon and unless stated as overpwered by ken im following the cannon ranking ontop of that as its a summoning type technique the poison used by the snakes is located on my summoning application refer to that and to the instant kill shadow immitation technique does exactly the same aswell as many jutsu You're missing my point. This is an auto-kill C RANK. No C rank jutsu is that powerful. - Quote :
Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: N/A Range: Short Chakra Use: Low Description: Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.
Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.
Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in
infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique
If it is like being a mole or hiding in water, then add that. As it stands right now it makes the ninja completely incapable of taking damage unless they have the correct element, and even then they would have to see you, which is extremely hard in a field of trees or even the ground.
And your point is if im fighting in a field of tree's and the jutsu is used then its used destroy that tree and there you go im there common knowledge it doesnt need to be added in or mentioned its like another jutsu on top of that they dont need the correct elements fire wind water lighting earth can all destroy a tree so your argument on this technique is invalid Don't tell me what my point is; 'cause you're entirely wrong. My point is: You can merge into the ground, what is essentially impossibly to shape, and become entirely untouchable. I used the forest as an example. Of course you can destroy a tree. Try destroying the ground itself. Only a high rank Raiton could, and even then the enemy would have to find you in a giant field. Not only that, but you didn't even mention how fast he can merge with said object. For all I know it could be instant and allow him to do it in repetition. NOT ONLY THAT, but the technique itself says that your character would "avoid any damage." That's as good as over powered can be. |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 5:51 pm | |
| Name: Snake Authority Spell Rank: C Type: Nin Element: N/A Range: Short - Long Chakra Use: Low Description: The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve. Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint. (Cannon Information AND cannon rank) I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that. Tough poop its ranking and abilities remain cannon and unless stated as overpwered by ken im following the cannon ranking ontop of that as its a summoning type technique the poison used by the snakes is located on my summoning application refer to that and to the instant kill shadow immitation technique does exactly the same aswell as many jutsu You're missing my point. This is an auto-kill C RANK. No C rank jutsu is that powerful. Read my snake contract its an immobilising technique that requires them to bite there opponent biting hurts (biting isnt something that increases rank) And i noticed in the chat i dont have the seals READ MY SUMMONING JUTSU WHICH IS IN MY APP THE SEALS ARE THERE Also here http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Snake_Authority_SpellDon't tell me what my point is; 'cause you're entirely wrong. My point is: You can merge into the ground, what is essentially impossibly to shape, and become entirely untouchable. I used the forest as an example. Of course you can destroy a tree. Try destroying the ground itself. Only a high rank Raiton could, and even then the enemy would have to find you in a giant field. Not only that, but you didn't even mention how fast he can merge with said object. For all I know it could be instant and allow him to do it in repetition. NOT ONLY THAT, but the technique itself says that your character would "avoid any damage." That's as good as over powered can be. Your point here then nullifies the hiding like a mole technique which allows sensing and movement within the ground hiding like a mole is c rank so please argue against that by all means like i said there are multiple jutsu that do the same this technique generally allows all ^^ |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 6:09 pm | |
| For the Attack Prevention thing. All I'm asking you to do is add restrictions into how it would make you less OP'd. At this current stage. You're untouchable. Just add something like "Takes a post to enter said object." Or "If the location is directly struck by chakra the user is harmed." This has nothing to do with Rank like you're trying to insist. I'm trying to make the move more legal. If you still don't get what I'm saying, imagine someone using that technique on your character. How would he be able to defeat someone merged in the ground? You don't even have a single technique that would allow you to defeat this person in the ground, if the technique stands as it does right now. |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 6:15 pm | |
| For the Attack Prevention thing. All I'm asking you to do is add restrictions into how it would make you less OP'd. At this current stage. You're untouchable. Just add something like "Takes a post to enter said object." Or "If the location is directly struck by chakra the user is harmed." This has nothing to do with Rank like you're trying to insist. I'm trying to make the move more legal. If you still don't get what I'm saying, imagine someone using that technique on your character. How would he be able to defeat someone merged in the ground? You don't even have a single technique that would allow you to defeat this person in the ground, if the technique stands as it does right now.
its not op at all if you utilise hiding like a mole your untouchable but restrctions are not placed on that
and as you asked
Like i said the user cant move from the merged area so you wait for them or simply begin to set up a trap its simple if you use your initative |
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| Subject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete Sun May 01, 2011 7:51 pm | |
| Approved, but i'll be monitering the way you use, some of the jutsu just in case. | |
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