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PostSubject: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySat Apr 30, 2011 9:46 am

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Name: Sohma Rain
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Village: Sunagakure



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Height: 5ft8
Weight: 145 pounds



Personality Information
Personality Description: Within a battle Rain is cool calm and collected, Never once will he underestimate his opponent no matter what the foe's rank is whether a genin or a kage, Within Rains mind a genin is just the same as a kage and needs to be handled like one. Life or Death battles excite the shinobi causing his flirty or cocky side to come out tho he acts in this manner once more underestimating his opponent is something he refuses to do.
During training, Rain will fight as if the fight is serious never underestimating or taking it easy on his partner, He refuses to go down in training tho is smart enough to not use deadly attack's to there full potential
Rain has had trouble dealing with his family alway's believing his older sister to be the favorite,
Likes: Rain enjoy's the usual thing's the rain the wamrth of a fire just like everyone else he has many likes to many to be listed
Dislikes: Arrogance
Lifetime Goals: Simple To protect his nakama
Role: To Protect His Village


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Rank: A-Rank (Jounin)
Jutsu Specialist: Nintai
Main: Fuin
Sub: Nin
Bloodline: Snake Handler's
Elements: Wind + Earth
Classes: Average Shinobi, Taijutsu Adept, Taijutsu Mastery
Stats: 115 + 40 + 20 + 20 = 195

Physical Stats
Speed: 40
Stamina: 25
Strength: 20
Agility: 30
Physical Endurance: 20

Chakra Stats:
Chakra Reserves: 40

Mental Stats
Intelligence: 20


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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 4:30 pm

Word your classes as they are mentioned in Class Abilities. Which means copy and paste the entire paragraph and space it out accordingly. I saw no mention of what your rank is. All it says is "A-Rank." Does that mean you're a missing-nin or a Jounin? (Pretty sure Missing-Nin is closed at the moment) Also; your snake contract has yet to be approved. So until then the profile cannot be approved even once you fix these mistakes. You also have 28 jutsu. If you plan on being Jounin-level, then remove eight.

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Stats: 115 + 40 + 20 + 20 = 195

Physical Stats
Speed: 40
Stamina: 30
Strength: 20
Agility: 30
Physical Endurance: 20

Chakra Stats:
Chakra Reserves: 40

Mental Stats
Intelligence: 20
Explain to me how that makes mathematical sense?

Now; onto jutsu.
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Name: Gathering Of Snake's
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Moderate
Description: If Orochimaru is somehow sliced in half by the opponent, snakes come from the halves and bring him back together.
That seems EXTREMELY god mod. Add some restrictions to it like how long it takes to heal and if it only applies to being sliced in half (for instance, if an arm were to be sliced off, would this technqiue work on it).
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Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.
Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.
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Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification
Rank: n/a
Type: Modification
Range: n/a
Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain.
Charge Time: Instant.
Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent
Make this C-A rank. Make the range "self." C rank should be basic body extending and bending, B would be advanced, and A would be what Orochimaru can do. I find this technique rather over powered, but they are still prone to attacks so there isn't anything wrong with it. You also have this technique placed twice. Remove one.
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Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve.
Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.
The bolded part, remove it. Self intelligence and inescapable restraint is way too strong for a C rank. Either drag it to B or remove that part in general. Also, the poison fangs bit is even more over powered for a C rank technique. Either remove it or drag it up a rank. If you want to keep it as it is it'll have to be A rank, as it's far too over powered as it is. Also, if you intend to keep the poison, add how long the effects last/take to kick in and whether or not it would be fatal. If the poison is weak enough you can keep it at C, unless you choose to keep the intelligence bit.
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Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Rank: B
Type: Nin-tai
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Chakra Use: Little.
Charge Time: None.
Duration: Fast.
Description: Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware.
Just change the name. You have it wrong xD You also placed this twice in your app, albeit in different names. Remove one.
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Name: Wind Release : Drilling Air Bullet's
Rank: B
Type: Nin
Element: Wind
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description: To use this technique, Shukaku will first take a deep breath, and then pound its stomach to apply external pressure, the power of which it uses to shoot a highly compressed air ball from its mouth. The expelled air ball is mighty enough to hollow out the ground, and level an entire forest. Because of the large quantity of chakra kneaded into it, it explodes the moment it reaches its target, dealing an enormous amount of damage, as well as leveling anything in its path.
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Name: Golem Technique
Rank: B
Type: Nin
Element: Earth
Range: All
Chakra Use: Moderate
Description:
This technique allows Akatsuchi to expel a large creature composed of rock from his mouth which will stay connected to his mouth.[1] The golem has a fair amount of brute strength, being able to bite and tear off an opponent's flesh with its mouth and hands, respectively. It is also very durable, as it was left almost completely intact after being hit by an explosion.[1] This makes the golem ideal for serving as both an ally and as a shield.
If you're going to copy pasta it word for word, at least remove the "[1]" 's. Just using this as an example, as there are many more similar to this. kthx
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Name: Weapon levitation Technique
Rank: B
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
This is a technique that allows Orochimaru to levitate the Sword of Kusanagi and attack foes at mid-range. The blade will move according to Orochimaru's finger movements.
Alter it to apply to every chakra based weapon, not just Kusanagi.

You're missing two E-rank, unless you just don't want to add them. That's about it for now. I have yet to read the History and Sample RP, but there is rarely anything wrong with those two. Also; put some more effort in your jutsu. It's extremely obvious you scraped them from a site. If there's a canon name in there, change the name to something like your character's name or "the user".
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 4:46 pm

Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve.
Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.

(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)

as to going through every jutsu removing cannon names and the number things well Uzumaki ken has cannon names in his jutsu which were approved so i wont be doing that


Half of the snake type jutsu are from the snake handler's clan already here which i used them from which ken approved

Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.

Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.

Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in

infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique


Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification
Rank: n/a
Type: Modification
Range: n/a
Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain.
Charge Time: Instant.
Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent

Make this C-A rank. Make the range "self." C rank should be basic body extending and bending, B would be advanced, and A would be what Orochimaru can do. I find this technique rather over powered, but they are still prone to attacks so there isn't anything wrong with it. You also have this technique placed twice. Remove one.

Its a cannon c rank What orochimaru does is c rank theres nothing over powered about being able to stretch your body


Name: Gathering Of Snake's
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Moderate
Description: If Orochimaru is somehow sliced in half by the opponent, snakes come from the halves and bring him back together.

That seems EXTREMELY god mod. Add some restrictions to it like how long it takes to heal and if it only applies to being sliced in half (for instance, if an arm were to be sliced off, would this technqiue work on it).

Ill add a limit to the usage on the technique most likely a two or three times limit
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 5:19 pm

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Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve.
Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.

(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)

I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that.

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Half of the snake type jutsu are from the snake handler's clan already here which i used them from which ken approved

It's not approved, first of all. Second, I don't care. If it's over powered, it's over powered.

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Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.

Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.

Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in

infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique

If it is like being a mole or hiding in water, then add that. As it stands right now it makes the ninja completely incapable of taking damage unless the opponent has the correct element, and even then they would have to see you, which is extremely hard in a field of trees or even the ground.

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Name: Nan Kaizou - Soften Modification
Rank: n/a
Type: Modification
Range: n/a
Chakra Use: Little for quick movements, becomes difficult to maintain.
Charge Time: Instant.
Description: Nan Kaizou is a Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to make their body very malleable. It was originally developed for spying activities. This technique can be done after surgery and actual body modification. When used the ninja can stretch and twist their body at any angle, allowing them to surprise their opponent

Make this C-A rank. Make the range "self." C rank should be basic body extending and bending, B would be advanced, and A would be what Orochimaru can do. I find this technique rather over powered, but they are still prone to attacks so there isn't anything wrong with it. You also have this technique placed twice. Remove one.

Its a cannon c rank What orochimaru does is c rank theres nothing over powered about being able to stretch your body
The user can contour their shape to fit the surrounding, I simply figured that would be at least B rank considering you're completely immune to Taijutsu in this manner. Also, it's not C rank in the canon, it's "Unknown." And I didn't say it was over powered, I said I think it's over powered. That's just my general opinion.

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Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Rank: B
Type: Nin-tai
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Chakra Use: Little.
Charge Time: None.
Duration: Fast.
Description: Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware.

Just change the name. You have it wrong xD You also placed this twice in your app, albeit in different names. Remove one.
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Name: Wind Release : Drilling Air Bullet's
Rank: B
Type: Nin
Element: Wind
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description: To use this technique, Shukaku will first take a deep breath, and then pound its stomach to apply external pressure, the power of which it uses to shoot a highly compressed air ball from its mouth. The expelled air ball is mighty enough to hollow out the ground, and level an entire forest. Because of the large quantity of chakra kneaded into it, it explodes the moment it reaches its target, dealing an enormous amount of damage, as well as leveling anything in its path.

Edit the description to fit your character.

You didn't fix these. The first one is incorrectly named, the second doesn't make sense for a human.

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Name: Vanishing Facial Copy Technique
Rank: B
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short
Chakra Use: Low
Description: This technique was developed for spying with grisly effects. The user applies their hand onto the subject's face, stealing its features and making it their own. Since what is stolen is the face itself, the disguise achieved through facial features alteration won't reveal the tiniest flaw. The victims of this technique are reduced to faceless corpses atrocious even to look at. The user can even change their voice to sound like that of the victims, making a very convincing copy. However, with enough force, the face can wrinkle and tear to the point of the user's actual face being shown underneath. The face can be peeled off at any point.
is the exact same as
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Name: Senei Ta Jashu - Multiple Hidden Shadow Snake Hands
Rank: B
Type: Nin-tai
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Chakra Use: Little.
Charge Time: None.
Duration: Fast.
Description: Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware.
except you screwed up the name and used a different description.
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 5:28 pm

Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve.
Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.

(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)


I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that.

Tough poop its ranking and abilities remain cannon and unless stated as overpwered by ken im following the cannon ranking ontop of that as its a summoning type technique the poison used by the snakes is located on my summoning application refer to that and to the instant kill shadow immitation technique does exactly the same aswell as many jutsu


Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.

Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.

Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in

infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique


If it is like being a mole or hiding in water, then add that. As it stands right now it makes the ninja completely incapable of taking damage unless they have the correct element, and even then they would have to see you, which is extremely hard in a field of trees or even the ground.

And your point is if im fighting in a field of tree's and the jutsu is used then its used destroy that tree and there you go im there common knowledge it doesnt need to be added in or mentioned its like another jutsu on top of that they dont need the correct elements fire wind water lighting earth can all destroy a tree so your argument on this technique is invalid
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 5:41 pm

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Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve.
Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.

(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)


I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that.

Tough poop its ranking and abilities remain cannon and unless stated as overpwered by ken im following the cannon ranking ontop of that as its a summoning type technique the poison used by the snakes is located on my summoning application refer to that and to the instant kill shadow immitation technique does exactly the same aswell as many jutsu
You're missing my point. This is an auto-kill C RANK. No C rank jutsu is that powerful.

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Name: Leech All Creation : Attack Prevention Technique
Rank: B
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: N/A
Range: Short
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
Using this jutsu, the user can merge with another object and take on its properties to avoid any damage. Orochimaru uses this to merge with a tree just before his battle with his former student, Anko Mitarashi.

Basically Mayfly technique.. Add some restrictions like if you merge with a tree, you are very weak to fire and the like. That was just an example, add more. "Avoiding any damage" just seems over powered.

Is not similar to may fly as the user can't move about the tree or whatever he hides in

infact it is similar to hiding like a mole or hiding in water technique


If it is like being a mole or hiding in water, then add that. As it stands right now it makes the ninja completely incapable of taking damage unless they have the correct element, and even then they would have to see you, which is extremely hard in a field of trees or even the ground.

And your point is if im fighting in a field of tree's and the jutsu is used then its used destroy that tree and there you go im there common knowledge it doesnt need to be added in or mentioned its like another jutsu on top of that they dont need the correct elements fire wind water lighting earth can all destroy a tree so your argument on this technique is invalid

Don't tell me what my point is; 'cause you're entirely wrong. My point is: You can merge into the ground, what is essentially impossibly to shape, and become entirely untouchable. I used the forest as an example. Of course you can destroy a tree. Try destroying the ground itself. Only a high rank Raiton could, and even then the enemy would have to find you in a giant field. Not only that, but you didn't even mention how fast he can merge with said object. For all I know it could be instant and allow him to do it in repetition. NOT ONLY THAT, but the technique itself says that your character would "avoid any damage." That's as good as over powered can be.
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 5:51 pm

Name: Snake Authority Spell
Rank: C
Type: Nin
Element: N/A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Use: Low
Description:
The user summons two big snakes which crawl out from one's sleeves, and coil around the enemy capturing them. This is a great technique for capturing someone alive, or for inflicting damage by constriction, and if the situation calls for it, the snakes can bite the victim with their poison fangs. With the summons specified beforehand, the procedure can be shortened by using blood on a summoning "contract seal" (??, ketsuin), making it possible to use the technique immediately. The further addition of the user's murderous intent can weaken their target's resolve.
Snakes summoned by this technique are on a whole other level in terms of intelligence and strength, compared to normal summons. It is said that even shinobi with great skill are unable to escape from this restraint.

(Cannon Information AND cannon rank)


I don't care if it's canon. It's flawed. The technique basically allows you to subject the target into an instant kill if they get too close. Also, I said define what the poison does. You didn't do that.

Tough poop its ranking and abilities remain cannon and unless stated as overpwered by ken im following the cannon ranking ontop of that as its a summoning type technique the poison used by the snakes is located on my summoning application refer to that and to the instant kill shadow immitation technique does exactly the same aswell as many jutsu

You're missing my point. This is an auto-kill C RANK. No C rank jutsu is that powerful.

Read my snake contract its an immobilising technique that requires them to bite there opponent biting hurts (biting isnt something that increases rank)

And i noticed in the chat i dont have the seals READ MY SUMMONING JUTSU WHICH IS IN MY APP THE SEALS ARE THERE

Also here

http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Snake_Authority_Spell



Don't tell me what my point is; 'cause you're entirely wrong. My point is: You can merge into the ground, what is essentially impossibly to shape, and become entirely untouchable. I used the forest as an example. Of course you can destroy a tree. Try destroying the ground itself. Only a high rank Raiton could, and even then the enemy would have to find you in a giant field. Not only that, but you didn't even mention how fast he can merge with said object. For all I know it could be instant and allow him to do it in repetition. NOT ONLY THAT, but the technique itself says that your character would "avoid any damage." That's as good as over powered can be.


Your point here then nullifies the hiding like a mole technique which allows sensing and movement within the ground hiding like a mole is c rank so please argue against that by all means

like i said there are multiple jutsu that do the same this technique generally allows all
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 6:09 pm

For the Attack Prevention thing. All I'm asking you to do is add restrictions into how it would make you less OP'd. At this current stage. You're untouchable. Just add something like "Takes a post to enter said object." Or "If the location is directly struck by chakra the user is harmed." This has nothing to do with Rank like you're trying to insist. I'm trying to make the move more legal. If you still don't get what I'm saying, imagine someone using that technique on your character. How would he be able to defeat someone merged in the ground? You don't even have a single technique that would allow you to defeat this person in the ground, if the technique stands as it does right now.
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 6:15 pm

For the Attack Prevention thing. All I'm asking you to do is add restrictions into how it would make you less OP'd. At this current stage. You're untouchable. Just add something like "Takes a post to enter said object." Or "If the location is directly struck by chakra the user is harmed." This has nothing to do with Rank like you're trying to insist. I'm trying to make the move more legal. If you still don't get what I'm saying, imagine someone using that technique on your character. How would he be able to defeat someone merged in the ground? You don't even have a single technique that would allow you to defeat this person in the ground, if the technique stands as it does right now.

its not op at all if you utilise hiding like a mole your untouchable but restrctions are not placed on that

and as you asked

Like i said the user cant move from the merged area so you wait for them or simply begin to set up a trap its simple if you use your initative
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PostSubject: Re: Rain Haruno Complete   Rain Haruno Complete EmptySun May 01, 2011 7:51 pm

Approved, but i'll be monitering the way you use, some of the jutsu just in case.
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